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I sit in the dark room in the back
Crying am I,
Confidence I lack.

Hurt by you and the words you said
The only color I see is the color red
I'm hurting so much I wish I was dead.

Crying and crying,
Hurting and hurting

You look at me with those cold blue eyes,
And now I know all you told was lies.

When you said you loved me
And how we'll always be
All I can think now is how I could not see

See through all of your lies
But now I look again into your eyes

I through back the tears
And everyone of my fears

I decide there are more fish in the sea
And many friends that can help me.
:icontheyaoimilkshakeaven:

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:iconthewaifencer:
Gooooooooodie.

A nice, short poem about feeling so hurt over an infatuation, then getting over it as you realize there are others around that are supporting ya. Very noice. I just have to argue, however, that the vocab seems pretty damn basic. But that's all. ^_^

Who's 'cold, blue eyes' though? XD

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Big Brother sees everything! But can he see why kids LOVE the cinnamony sweet taste of Cinnamon Toast Crunch?
:iconkida-ll:
I'm familiar with the feeling, tho' for me was a very different thing, but still, I like this lines ->
"the words you said
you look at me with those cold blue eyes
...you said you love me
...how could I not see"

With those I'm familiar :)
Good you decided to move on! :hug:
:iconsabianmoogle:
Great poem. Sounds like your goin' through something kinda rough... If ya ever need to talk you know my number. Who is it about if you dont mind my asking?

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Dano: What developes in a human ovary?
Syd: EGG!!
Dano: What type of egg?
Syd: TAPEWORM!!!
Dano: What?! How would that get there?!
Syd: Bad digestive system!
Dano: THEY'RE NOT EVEN CONNECTED!!!
Syd: REALLY bad digestive system!
Dano: X_X
:icontheyaoimilkshakeaven:
its about eric gander yeah he likes bubba and im kinda pissed off
every time i call the answering machine picks up where are you?
:icontheyaoimilkshakeaven:
thanks 4 the kind words my good friend
yes right now my love is in love with my enemy
:stab: (stupid bitch took my love)
:icontheyaoimilkshakeaven:
i told u who cold blue eyes was and im a girl not a dictionary
:iconthewaifencer:
XD Yeah, yeah, yeah. But I was just saying, you know. You could get out a thesaurus or something. It'd really help the poem. Just strengthen your vocabulary is all I'm saying. It'll make your poetry really cool, and much more fun to read.

And yeah, I know who it is.

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Big Brother sees everything! But can he see why kids LOVE the cinnamony sweet taste of Cinnamon Toast Crunch?
:iconkida-ll:
remember, lots of fishes! ^^
:icontheyaoimilkshakeaven:
thanks for the tip hons i love kevin miller and his hair (but in a good healthy way)

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